Monday, February 13, 2012

Those kissy scenes are hard to write sometimes, but I love reading one when it's crafted so well it feels like I'm standing beside the characters, watching with inflamed cheeks as sparks fly between the two lovebirds. Hello and welcome to a steamy (but clean) Valentines Day Blog Hop from Reading Writing and Lovin' it! I am here to attempt a great kissing scene and maybe you'll like it.

Shadows stretched through the trees slashing stripes of dying sunlight across the forest floor.  I stepped gently on the still warmth of the earth, aware that I was being watched.  If Garret was nearby he was well concealed, his dark skin blended effortlessly with the fading light.  Still, I could sense him, not with my eyes, with a deeper awareness like a magnetic pull.
“You came.” A deep voice.  His voice.
In the black wall of shadows, a silhouette took shape, leaning against a poplar’s trunk, his hat covering his eyes.
“Didn’t you want me to?” I asked, stepping closer.
He smiled, tipping up his hat to reveal his eyes. Onyx and diamonds.  He took in a sharp breath, his chest sucking in air, exerting energy. “You are...” Words were beyond his grasp. He held onto the tree trunk with tensed fingers, pinched his lips shut, huffed through his nose and tried again. “I need you.”
Lips. They fell towards me.  Hovering.  I reached up and slid his hat off.  I floated up to those lips, softly touching them, sinking into them. He exhaled, shaking, and pressed in again. Magnets. His hat fell to the ground.
I thought  somehow I was dreaming and the night had just begun. 

14 comments:

Dawn Ius said...

Brilliant! Happy Valentine's Day fellow Spirited contributor AND published Vine Leaves poet :-)

I'm #52 on the hop...

Nancy Thompson said...

Whoa! Sounds like she has a nice night ahead of her!! Thanks for sharing. I'm a new follower via the bloghop!

Hope Roberson said...

Beautiful imagery here! Nicely done with great emotion :)

Cassie Mae said...

Whew! That was... ya, some steam coming off me right now. :)

Shell Flower said...

I love the magnetic pull, that's when you know there's chemistry. This is seriously hot!

LynNerdKelley said...

What beautiful writing! I love this!

Ashley Nixon said...

This was wonderful! I enjoyed your writing style as well! It made this scene more intense! Great job!

El said...

Great post! Really intense! I want to read more!!! Looking forward to following you!

Jade Hart said...

Your descriptions were spot on :) thanks for sharing. A very worthy V-day post :) New follower, glad I found you !:)

Ishta Mercurio said...

Well, oochy scenes squick me out, but I liked the way you used the shadows of the trees slashing lines of sunlight on the floor to set the scene. And it left me squicked out, so I guess that means you did a good job!

phyllis sweetwater said...

thank you everyone! I'm thankful for all of your positive feedback

Lisa L. Regan said...

Very poetic. I love it. Well done!

The Capillary said...

Secret romance? New lovers? That's the impression I get. Well done.

phyllis sweetwater said...

Capillary, secret romance AND and new lovers! You read me write/ right.